[Slime Suggestion] Rainbow Slime [REPOST]

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[Slime Suggestion] Rainbow Slime [REPOST]

Postby xXDeoGeoXx » Fri Jan 15, 2016 3:14 pm

Hello people! Well... This is a slime suggestion! I don't think I really know what to put up here...

EDIT: Reposted here ;3

Plort Base Value: 100

Rarity: Found sometimes after raining.

Rainbow Slime

Mini Description: Your sure to have a raintastic time.
Diet: Fruits
Favorite: (none)

SLIMEOLOGY
These slimes come after raining. Once it stops raining, look everywhere! There could be one nearby. They are very hard to find, since they are rainbows, they can shift colors/colours of their surroundings at will, therefore you can only see the outline of the slime sometimes. They love fruits, most especially the Chromaberry!

RANCHER RISKS
Since they can shift to the colors/colours around them, they could be anywhere, therefore could possibly produce a Tarr without you even knowing! They can also jump really high, which means they could possibly jump into a nearby corral and possibly produce a Tarr.

PLORTONOMICS
Their rainbow plorts are used mainly by painters to get all the different types of colors/colours. The plorts can also help people by inspiring them to make something with rainbow colors/colours.

Well, thats about it for now. You can tell me on what to improve too, so I can make this suggestion better :3 So yeah! Thanks for reading! :3
Last edited by xXDeoGeoXx on Sat Jan 16, 2016 6:38 pm, edited 2 times in total.
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Re: [Slime Suggestion] Rainbow Slime [REPOST]

Postby DeltaStorm » Fri Jan 15, 2016 3:16 pm

xXDeoGeoXx wrote:Well, thats about it for now. You can tell me on what to improve too, so I can make this suggestion better :3 So yeah! Thanks for reading! :3


'Ey mate, you should check out my guide on making slime ideas if you want some tips and improvements.

It's in my signature.
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Re: [Slime Suggestion] Rainbow Slime [REPOST]

Postby xXDeoGeoXx » Fri Jan 15, 2016 3:18 pm

DeltaStorm wrote:
xXDeoGeoXx wrote:Well, thats about it for now. You can tell me on what to improve too, so I can make this suggestion better :3 So yeah! Thanks for reading! :3


'Ey mate, you should check out my guide on making slime ideas if you want some tips and improvements.

It's in my signature.

Well that was quick XD But yeah, I'm pretty sure I read it. (Or did I just zoom through it? I think I did. I'm sorry :P)
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Re: [Slime Suggestion] Rainbow Slime [REPOST]

Postby DeltaStorm » Fri Jan 15, 2016 3:28 pm

xXDeoGeoXx wrote:
DeltaStorm wrote:
xXDeoGeoXx wrote:Well, thats about it for now. You can tell me on what to improve too, so I can make this suggestion better :3 So yeah! Thanks for reading! :3


'Ey mate, you should check out my guide on making slime ideas if you want some tips and improvements.

It's in my signature.

Well that was quick XD But yeah, I'm pretty sure I read it. (Or did I just zoom through it? I think I did. I'm sorry :P)


I have a section 'bout balance now, you should read it as your slime seems a bit unbalanced in parts, it may help you.
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Re: [Slime Suggestion] Rainbow Slime [REPOST]

Postby DeltaStorm » Fri Jan 15, 2016 3:34 pm

xXDeoGeoXx wrote:Hello people! Well... This is a slime suggestion! I don't think I really know what to put up here...

EDIT: Reposted here ;3

Plort Base Value: 100

Rarity: Found anywhere near a rainbow.

Rainbow Slime

Mini Description: Your sure to have a raintastic time.
Diet: Fruits
Favorite: Chromaberry

SLIMEOLOGY
These slimes come from rainbows, therefore are very rare. Once you see a rainbow in the sky, run to it! You might find a rainbow slime. They are very hard to find, since they are rainbows, they can shift colors/colours of their surroundings at will, therefore you can only see the outline of the slime sometimes. They love fruits, most especially the Chromaberry!

RANCHER RISKS
Since they can shift to the colors/colours around them, they could be anywhere, therefore could possibly produce a Tarr without you even knowing! They can also jump really high, which means they could possibly jump into a nearby corral and possibly produce a Tarr, so High Walls and Air Nets are defiantly recommended for keeping these slimes.

PLORTONOMICS
Their rainbow plorts are used mainly by painters to get all the different types of colors/colours. The plorts can also help people by inspiring them to make something with rainbow colors/colours.

Chromaberry

Mini Description: It's shifting colors/colours makes you feel different moods.
Type: Fruit
Favored By: Rainbow Slime
On The Ranch: Deposit a chromaberry into a garden's depositor, and you'll grow a chromaberry bush of your very own. This bush will last for several harvests. The Chromaberry includes all the different flavors of every berry on the Far Far Range. It's favorited by rainbow slimes because they like having a complete berry meal.

Well, thats about it for now. You can tell me on what to improve too, so I can make this suggestion better :3 So yeah! Thanks for reading! :3



Btw, if you don't mind, i'm gonna pick apart your idea.

1. Rainbow spawn area = stupid because the rainbows we see is just water droplets reflecting lights in our eyes, so they will always be far away. Might want to see if you can tweak it (Perhaps you can find one after its been raining, as there is hints of weather being added into the game)

2. You might want to make the slime not have a favorite, it's basically half a gold slime, it having a favorite basically is equal to that of a gold slime.

3. Don't include the direct methods of stopping the risks, they just come off as forced unless you do it in a way which seems natural. Like for example 'The slime ocassionally explodes and sends other slimes flying, you may want to use an air net for precautions' seems way better then ' so High Walls and Air Nets are defiantly recommended for keeping these slimes.' because it comes off as forced.

Just some nice criticism :)
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Re: [Slime Suggestion] Rainbow Slime [REPOST]

Postby xXDeoGeoXx » Fri Jan 15, 2016 3:54 pm

DeltaStorm wrote:
xXDeoGeoXx wrote:Hello people! Well... This is a slime suggestion! I don't think I really know what to put up here...

EDIT: Reposted here ;3

Plort Base Value: 100

Rarity: Found anywhere near a rainbow.

Rainbow Slime

Mini Description: Your sure to have a raintastic time.
Diet: Fruits
Favorite: Chromaberry

SLIMEOLOGY
These slimes come from rainbows, therefore are very rare. Once you see a rainbow in the sky, run to it! You might find a rainbow slime. They are very hard to find, since they are rainbows, they can shift colors/colours of their surroundings at will, therefore you can only see the outline of the slime sometimes. They love fruits, most especially the Chromaberry!

RANCHER RISKS
Since they can shift to the colors/colours around them, they could be anywhere, therefore could possibly produce a Tarr without you even knowing! They can also jump really high, which means they could possibly jump into a nearby corral and possibly produce a Tarr, so High Walls and Air Nets are defiantly recommended for keeping these slimes.

PLORTONOMICS
Their rainbow plorts are used mainly by painters to get all the different types of colors/colours. The plorts can also help people by inspiring them to make something with rainbow colors/colours.

Chromaberry

Mini Description: It's shifting colors/colours makes you feel different moods.
Type: Fruit
Favored By: Rainbow Slime
On The Ranch: Deposit a chromaberry into a garden's depositor, and you'll grow a chromaberry bush of your very own. This bush will last for several harvests. The Chromaberry includes all the different flavors of every berry on the Far Far Range. It's favorited by rainbow slimes because they like having a complete berry meal.

Well, thats about it for now. You can tell me on what to improve too, so I can make this suggestion better :3 So yeah! Thanks for reading! :3



Btw, if you don't mind, i'm gonna pick apart your idea.

1. Rainbow spawn area = stupid because the rainbows we see is just water droplets reflecting lights in our eyes, so they will always be far away. Might want to see if you can tweak it (Perhaps you can find one after its been raining, as there is hints of weather being added into the game)

2. You might want to make the slime not have a favorite, it's basically half a gold slime, it having a favorite basically is equal to that of a gold slime.

3. Don't include the direct methods of stopping the risks, they just come off as forced unless you do it in a way which seems natural. Like for example 'The slime ocassionally explodes and sends other slimes flying, you may want to use an air net for precautions' seems way better then ' so High Walls and Air Nets are defiantly recommended for keeping these slimes.' because it comes off as forced.

Just some nice criticism :)


Re-Edited :3 Better?
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Re: [Slime Suggestion] Rainbow Slime [REPOST]

Postby xXDeoGeoXx » Wed Jan 27, 2016 6:20 pm

Boop!!
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Re: [Slime Suggestion] Rainbow Slime [REPOST]

Postby HunterSlime » Wed Jan 27, 2016 6:38 pm

Might need some adjustments but might become a great new slime! :D
I cant wait for the hunter slimes and I love the tarr! :D
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Re: [Slime Suggestion] Rainbow Slime [REPOST]

Postby Hugger » Wed Jan 27, 2016 9:35 pm

I think it would be cute if it was super colorful during the day, but at night it was kind of dark gray and sleeping. Since it is a rainbow.

Taking that a little farther, perhaps it could get irritated being out of the sun too long? Say if you wanted to keep it in a solar protected corral for what ever reason.
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